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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

There are different opinions about the benefits of studying in a foreign country. Some people argue that the advantages of
this
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 action outweigh its disadvantages ,
while
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 others think
otherwise
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. I strongly believe studying abroad has many advantages. The decision to go abroad to
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study
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 as part of our studies has several benefits , like getting familiar with new cultures from different parts of the world and learning new languages.
Furthermore
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, some who could speak two or three languages could obtain a better professional opportunity, and
consequently
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 a better salary.
For instance
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, studying abroad
in
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at
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high-level
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a high-level
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 university gives us an excellent curriculum vitae , which gives us a chance to
reach
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secure
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 a good job in the future. Others believe quitting our country for even a short period costs too much
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, and
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 being far
by
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from
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 our family does not value going abroad to study since
causes
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it causes
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 a lot of difficulties. We have to rent a place or a dormitory to live and stay during our studies, which requires very much money.
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, living far away from our family
create
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 mental issues because of do not have confidence and good company. In conclusion, it is quite common these days to see young people who spend part of their studies abroad, which has pros and cons ,
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 as learning a new language, adapting to a new culture or paying a lot to live. I think the social and professional benefits of
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 trend outweigh any drawbacks it may have.

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content
Use one clear idea in each paragraph and add a simple example for that idea.
language
Fix small grammar errors and keep sentences short and clean.
structure
Use daily linking words (also, however, for example) to join ideas.
structure
The essay uses a simple, clear plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Link words such as Moreover and In addition show good flow between ideas.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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