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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Current
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The current
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 age of
technology
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 and AI is believed by
majority
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the majority
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 to be the prime
time
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 to be alive. I do share the idea which has given the whole world and its resources at the palm of our hand.
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Also
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Also,
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 I believe
in
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that
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 the 90s
when
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, when
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 the development had just
started
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started,
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 would be a fun day to revisit. The new era of
technology
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 has countless benefits
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 as educational support, business revolution and space exploration. Latest inventions have helped
student
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students
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 in
preforming
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performing
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 excellence in their
academic
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academics
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while
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 assisting
in
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teachers in
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 teacher to build
a
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apply
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more diverse and innovative practical scenarios.
Additionally
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,
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This
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this
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 new generation of
internet
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the internet
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 with widespread social media has helped countless small business owner by enhancing their reach for business through
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median
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media
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.
Moreover
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,
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This
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this
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 new improvement in robotics has helped
achieve
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apply
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uncover
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the secret
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secret
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secrets
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 of far
stretching
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far-reaching
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 universe
while
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 doing deep dive ocean exploration. Even though
, World
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the world
 is at our
fingertip
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fingertips
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, People have lost connection with their neighbours. For
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 a reason, I believe it will be interesting to revisit 1990. The
time
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 when
,
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apply
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 anyone can access
technology
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such
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 as
computer
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a computer
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, but
also
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 enjoy hanging out with friends.
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Arguably,
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 that was the
last
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time
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 when friends
have
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had
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honest
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an honest
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 connection with each other. A recent study by Daily
planet
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Planet
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suggest
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suggests
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 that,
Even
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even
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 though emerging
technology
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 will make everyone close, People will forget about
local
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the local
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 community. In conclusion,
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Although
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although
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 there is significant
assistant
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 from
current
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the current
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 technological revolution that anyone can relish. 1990
Can
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can
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also
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 be considered
an
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a
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 great period of
time
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 where one can relieve the age of technologies getting
revolutionize
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revolutionised
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.

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Task Response
Your view is clear. You say now is the best time to live and you like the old time too. Keep the main idea in mind as you write.
Structure
Each big idea should have its own paragraph. Start with a short sentence that states the idea, then give one or two details.
Language
Use short, simple sentences. Break long sentences into two parts.
Content
Give clear examples that fit the idea and show why they matter.
Idea
You show a clear view that the present time has big power in tech.
Reasoning
You compare now with the 1990s and give reason.
Content
You name many parts of life that tech helps, like study and business.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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