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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in toady's society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view.

It is often argued that certain practices in advertising are considered to be unethical and inappropriate in today’s world. I completely agree with
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 view.
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 their negative influence on society. One major reason why advertising can be seen as unethical is
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 it often misleads consumers. Many companies exaggerate the benefits of their products in order to increase sales.
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, fast food is frequently promoted as healthy or exciting,
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 it may cause serious health problems
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 as obesity.
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,
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 techniques are dishonest and can damage public trust. Another problem with advertising is that it can negatively influence vulnerable groups, especially children. Young audiences are easily persuaded by
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 images and attractive slogans, which can lead to unhealthy habits or unnecessary spending.
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, toy companies often target children directly, encouraging them to pressure their parents into buying products they do not really need.
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 shows that advertising is not always socially responsible. In conclusion, I strongly believe that many methods used in advertising are unethical because they mislead people and influence society in harmful ways. Advertisers should adopt more honest and responsible approaches in order to maintain public trust.

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task
Say what you think at the start and give two or three clear reasons.
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Give more detail for each reason with a real example.
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Add a short note on other views and then say why you still agree.
coherence
Use words to join parts: first, next, also, finally.
coherence
Make each part fit to the one before.
coherence
Use short and clear sentences to help flow.
structure
Clear take on the point
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Two main points with examples
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Conclusion repeats the view

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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