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Band 5

You have recently started working in a new company. write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you changed job discribe your new job tell him/her about other news

Dear Simu, I hope my letter
find
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 you in your best health and spirit. I am going to share
excitement
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 news with you regarding my new job. I got a job as a Quality Supervisor in
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a recognized
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recognized
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recognised
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company
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 "Give and Go".
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, I was working in
Five
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a Five
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 Star
company
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 as a machine operator. The environment was friendly
but
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, but
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 that
company
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 never promoted , even some employees were working
over
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there
from
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last
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the last
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 25 years
as well
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as
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and
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 they never appreciated
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the workers
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workers
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workers'
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hardwork
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hard work
.
However
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,
this
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 new
company
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 always motivate employees for their
hardwork
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hard work
as well as
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 provides benefits
such
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 as dental care,
message
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and
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 many more things
includes
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.
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, I like to work in
food
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a food
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 production
company
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 because I have done my study in Food Processing and
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Technology
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Technician
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Technician,
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as well as
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 the
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company
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company's
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surrounding
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 are friendly and motivating. When you
will
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hear
this
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 news, you will feel over the moon. I am eagerly waiting for your response! Thanks! Yours truly, Hb

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task
Put one idea in one part. Show why you left, then tell of the new job, then say other news.
coherence
Make flow clear with short, easy sentences. Use and, but, then to tie ideas.
strength
The letter says why you left the old job and what your new work is.
strength
The tone is warm and the closing is clean.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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