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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

In today’s
globalized
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 world, some argue that many individuals are becoming enjoyed in exploring the historical novel of their house. It is related to
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 curiosity,
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 the best source of gaining these details is through inspecting in local council and studying the marks, which present their meaning. The main reason for exploration should be found in
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 nature who unconsciously have curiosity. Informing about when a building is constructed? Who had lived there previously? And where did the architecture inspire in order to build the house? The answers to these questions can be found.
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, built by Shah Jahan’s order in India, the Taj
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become
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 the symbol of adoration
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throughout the world, as his purpose was to prove his fondness
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 his wife.
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,
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 passion creates an opportunity for increasing their public knowledge about their historical monuments. There exist various ways to gain a lot of information about a house’s history.
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, two of which are significant,
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 as inquiring from
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 council and
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from
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architectural symbols. A building’s design shows the resource of inspiration,
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, the Faravahar, one of the most famous symbols of Zoroastrianism, has three rows of wings, which represent the principles of Good Thoughts, Good Words, and Good Deeds.
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, the municipal councils maintain important information about residential maps, photographs, and property development records.
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, if people send an email to
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 council, they understand different stories behind every structure.
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, finding data could contribute to creating different views for bodies. Mainly, historical
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 not only have absorbed much
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 from previous years, but
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 can show
people’s
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 desire to connect to the past and understand their heritage.

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structure
Plan your idea. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then have 2 body parts with one idea each and a short end.
fact-checking
Be careful with facts. Check names and dates. Use clear and simple facts to back up your idea.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas are connected, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'then', and finish with a short conclusion.
content
You try to answer both why people want the history and how to find it.
content
Examples are given, like local councils and symbols, which show you know the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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