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Some people think litter in public places is a serious problem, others do not think so. What is your opinion?

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It has been intensively argued whether it is a tremendous issue if trash is thrown in public
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. I completely agree that rubbish in public places is problematic to human beings. I will elaborate on the reasons for my viewpoint in the following paragraphs. It will bring a negative impact on the image of the
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 to tourists and visitors if rubbish in public
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 is out of control. When travellers from other countries and cities visit the
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, they can have an unpleasant experience once they observe a messy environment and
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 awful air
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.
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 they will share their experiences and feelings with their acquittances. Even worse if the visitors are investors or public officers from other countries because they might give up their investment plans,
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, it will lead to a financial loss to the area.
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, Beijing managed to be a tidy and well-organized
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 before the 2008 Olympic games,
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, Beijing could build up a positive impression and solid reputation in front of the world and it can
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 attract investments from all over the world to China.
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, civilians’ health can be threatened as trash in public
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 leads to various environmental pollution. Air pollution is one of the outstanding problems as wastes from food and daily usage can produce an awful
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 and spread the
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 to the residents nearby if these wastes are not dealt with appropriately, living residents’ mental health will be influenced as the
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 can cause anxiety and depression. Meanwhile, litter in public
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 can make soil polluted,
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, the vegetables and grain grown on the land will be unhealthy and it will be harmful to individuals to eat them. In conclusion, there might be some reasons to support that people who do not believe litter in public
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 is a big issue.
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, in my view of point, I believe that it cannot be easily underestimated
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matter from the perspective of the
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's reputation or human health.

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task achievement
While your essay presents a thorough and nuanced argument, consider refining your topic sentences to make them more compelling. This can better guide the reader through your main points.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to small grammatical errors and awkward phrasing to make your argument more fluid. Consider rephrasing sentences for better readability.
task achievement
You have successfully addressed the prompt comprehensively and provided a clear stance on the issue, which is essential for a strong task response.
task achievement
Your essay contains well-supported main points and detailed examples that reinforce your arguments, making it easier for the reader to follow and agree with your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which enhances its readability and coherence.
coherence cohesion
There is a good flow in your argument, and your main points are logically connected, making the essay cohesive and easy to follow.
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