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Nowadays, many medical research projects are carried out by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that the research should be carried out by the individual, private companies or by the government?

Recently, many private firms
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 responsibility to carry out medical
research
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.
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 some believe that it should be done by the
authorities
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, others are in favour of private organisations. From my perspective, it is the prime duty of
authorities
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 to support medical investigation programs by providing enough funds. Medical and disease-related investigations require professional equipment
which
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 is extremely expensive and nearly impossible to afford by private firms. Since the
government
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 is responsible for keeping
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free country
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country free
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.
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,
authorities
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 should provide funds and enough money to carry out
research
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-based programs.
According to
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 statistics provided by Harvard University,
research
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 done under
government
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 support to control the influenza virus was successfully completed
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as they were provided with enough resources and money.
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,
research
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that is
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 done under the supervision of
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,
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 spreads easily.
Because the
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 central
government
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 controls the advertisement sector and publishes the most recent statistics on a daily basis.
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, helps to spread awareness among civilians.
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, during
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic,
State
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the State
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 of China
had run
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research
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-based programs to evaluate the cause of the disease and measures to prevent and control infection among people. Every day, measures to control infection were advertised on national TV channels, which helped people to rid
of
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 the disease swiftly. Another advantage of performing
research
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 under the
supervison
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supervision
 of
state
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the state
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 is to get attention
accross
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across
 the world that not only
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government
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 performance but
also
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provide
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chance
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a chance
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 to other countries to participate in
research
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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 much
research
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 has been done in the past by some individuals and private firms. Unfortunately, the outcome was not as successful as it would have been with the support of the state,
because of
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 the availability of enough funds and resources.

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Task Response
Make your view clear at the start and keep it there in every paragraph.
Task Response
Try to show a small counter view and then say why your choice is best.
Coherence
Use one topic sentence for each paragraph to show the path of idea.
Coherence
Link parts of text with simple words like and, but, so, then to join ideas.
Accuracy
Keep facts simple and say where you get them from if you can, or state it as a idea.
Content
You state a clear view that the state should guide and fund work.
Content
You use some real scenes to show why the state may help more.
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