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The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.

The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between 2010 and the present day.
The maps compare the layout of a campus in 2010 with its present form.
Overall
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,
while
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 a lawn and setting area were removed, the campus has undergone major improvements, including the replacement of old buildings and the introduction of new facilities. In 2010, at the centre of the campus, there was a lake encircled by a lawn and
setting
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seating
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 areas. To the east of
this
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 green space stood
row
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a row
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 of shops,
whereas
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 a restaurant was located
further
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 south. There were
also
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 two student accommodation blocks: one situated adjacent to
university
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offices
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, and another positioned closer to the lake. A teaching block for arts and science was located opposite the
university
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offices
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, separated by a road. At present, the shops and
university
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offices
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 have been replaced
into
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with
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 a single multi-purpose building, which now stands on the site of the former dormitory south of the lake. Meanwhile, the teaching block
have
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has
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 been replaced by two separate teaching buildings. The arts building remains in its original location,
then
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 the science building occupies the space where the
university
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offices
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 once stood.
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, a new student accommodation block has been constructed next to the existing dormitory once in the west
, and
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side, and
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 another on the site previously occupied by the restaurant.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, offices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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