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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Personally
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Personally,
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i
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I
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 agree with the given statement.
Inventors
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,
which
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who
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 are commonly working behind the
screen
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scenes
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 and have no certainty on their products or
invention
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inventions
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 rarely published in the media.
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While in
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On
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 the other hand,
doctors
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commonly
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are commonly
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 shown to the patients and sometimes
getting
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get
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 advertised by mouth-to-mouth from
a
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one
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 patient to another
patient
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apply
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.
This
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give
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gives
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doctors
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 more
chance
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chances
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 to
be
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show
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showed-up
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up
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instead
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 of
inventors
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. But
in
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on
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 the other
side
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hand
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,
inventors
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holding
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hold
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 the same crucial role as
doctors
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 too. Without
inventors
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, we may be overwhelmed in inventing tech and gadgets, stuck
the
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at the
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industry
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industry's
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 progress level for a long decade.
Inventors
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also
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 sometimes think out of the box compared to the normal person and
produced
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produce
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 creative tools that help our day. At the final summary,
doctors
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 and
inventors
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 both hold a strong and crucial role that
involving
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involves
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 our
live's
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lives'
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 convenience. But in society, the most
and
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apply
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common
shown role
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role shown
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 will be dominated
the
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by the
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 viewers
agains anothers
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against others
.

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planning
Plan your answer first. Say what you think, then give a reason, and finish with one simple example.
coherence
Use clear link words to show how ideas go with each other, like and, but, also, for example.
structure
Start a new line for a new idea so the page is easy to read.
content
You make your view clear at the start.
tone
You see that both roles have value and you say this in the end.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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