The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Write a summery with 150 words

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Write a summery with 150 words
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Write a summery with 150 words
The bar chart shows information about the number of car journeys into the city
center
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centre
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conducted by incomers and
citizines
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citizens
.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the journeys of the residents experienced
upward
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an upward
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from
Check wording
trend from
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1996 to 1999 before it began to
have
Verb problem
apply
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a
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apply
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fluctuated
Wrong verb form
fluctuate
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figures
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apply
show examples
.
In contrast
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, the non-resident group showed a noticeable surpassed from 2000 to 2002. In terms of the
forien
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foreign
,
this
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figure
initially
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witnessed the highest from 1996 to 1999 above
approximitely
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approximately
9000 who
drived
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drove
in the city
center
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centre
show examples
.
However
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, from the year 2000, it dropped
dramatecally
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dramatically
by about 5000
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
continued to show
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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fluctuating
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figure.
On the other hand
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, the number of car
journey
Fix the agreement mistake
journeys
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for
citizines
Correct your spelling
citizens
remaining
Wrong verb form
remained at
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a
gradually
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gradual
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rise from 1996 to 1999
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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recorded
Verb problem
apply
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peaked in 1999 by about 8200 non-residents.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • car journeys
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • increase
  • years
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • difference
  • gap
  • widened
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