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The plans below show how an office building was converted to a dental clinic

The planned maps depict the transformation of an
office
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 complex into a dental laboratory. Looking at the map from a general perspective,
this
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 building has undergone
such
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 significant changes, which
changes
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changed
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 its
purposes
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purpose
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. Notably, the
office
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 spaces are demolished and converted into
treatment
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 rooms To commence with the
office
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 building, a main entrance is located on the left
side
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, leading directly. To the east of the reception, there is a kitchen
room
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 beside the
office
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room
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, bringing convenience and effectiveness for labourers,
while
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 the top right corner of the building accommodates open plan spaces. Going right to the bottom, a toilet is incorporated with
office
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 2, with the storage and
office
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 3 on the left and right
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side
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sides
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, respectively. As for the dental clinic, it is notable that the new layout undergoes major modifications. To start with, reception remains unchanged
,
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however
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, the next to
kitchen
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the kitchen
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 and
office
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 1 are merged into
huge
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a huge
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treatment
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room
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 1.
In addition
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, there is an expansion of
treatment
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room
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 2 on the north
side
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 of the map, with an appearance of
treatment
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room
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, which replaces
office
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 3.
Furthermore
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, the toilet is relocated to the opposite
side
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 of the storage
and
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, and
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 the old position is converted into
stenilisation
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a stenilisation
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.

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overview
Improve the plan by making a short start idea, then group changes by area. Use a clear view of the map at the start and a short summary at the end.
language
Use simple, steady sentences. Check prepositions for spots like left, right, top or bottom. For example, say 'the entrance is on the left' rather than 'to commence with'.
grammar
Keep the same verb form when you talk about changes. Use 'is removed' or 'is turned into', not mixed forms.
coherence
Tell the story in order: old plan first, new plan next. Use 'first', 'next', 'then', 'finally' to link ideas.
idea
The essay shows a clear aim to change the office into a clinic.
layout
The plan uses some proper terms like 'reception' and 'treatment room' to show layout.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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