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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending in Springfield college in three years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending in Springfield college in three years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Three pie charts
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 the budget and changes in one college in per cent in 3 years (1990, 2000, 2010)
Overall
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, all kinds of
spendings
Use the right word
spending
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 experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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 other workers' salaries and books had
gradual
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a gradual
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 decrease, insurance and technology experienced a huge increase. At the same time, furniture equipment and teacher salaries
had
Verb problem
apply
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a
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apply
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fluctuation. As the pie chart shows, books and workers' monthly pay started at
15
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15%
 and 28 % in 1990. The figure had a sharp decrease to 13 and 22 % in 2000, and finished the
figure
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year
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 at 9 and 15 %. Regarding, about 2 and 1 % were
spended
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spent
to
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on
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 insurance and technology in 1990.
This
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 figure grew up to 3% in both of them in 2000 and finished with a sharp
grow
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growth
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 to 8 and 20% in 2010
By contrast
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, furniture and teachers'
salary
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salaries
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 experienced a fluctuation
the
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throughout the
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 whole period. Starting at 14 and 40% in 1990,
number
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the number
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 changed to 2 and 50% in 2000, finishing at 3 and 45% in 2010

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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