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The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010.

The pie charts below show the types of music media used from 1990 to 2010.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of different music media used
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1990, 2000 and 2010.
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, people’s listening habits changed significantly over the 20-year period, shifting from physical formats to digital audio.
It is clear that
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 in 1990,
CD
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CDs
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 were the most widely used format, accounting for about half of total music consumption. In comparison, cassettes made up 25% and vinyl records represented 20%, both figures being lower than that of
CD
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CDs
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.
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, in the next decade, the percentage of CDs spiked to over 90%, and the majority of people tended to use
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 format. Another interesting point is that both cassettes and vinyl disappeared.
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, a new medium, digital audio, emerged. By 2010, digital audio had become the dominant format, accounting for 60% of total consumption. Meanwhile, CDs dropped significantly to just 25%, and vinyl records, though reintroduced, remained marginal at only 5%.

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