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Band 2.5

More and more people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes and other items. What are the reason for this. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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this
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 digital
age
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age,
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 people are becoming more addicted to materialistic
things
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 like
well knowed
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well-known
 cars , clothes and other
items
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branded items
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brand
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apply
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. The Major reason behind
this
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 trend is
Reliablity
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reliability
 and
level
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the level
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 of lifestyle
poeple
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people
 get from buying
things
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 from brands .Some may consider
this
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 as
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a postiive
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postiive
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positive
 wave
but
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, but
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i
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I
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 consider
this
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 popular wave as negative. One of the Major
reason
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reasons
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of
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for
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this
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 trend to be negative is show off . Those who
owns
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own
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 or have
such
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things
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 make other
poeple
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people
 feel poor by showing them
such
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things
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 and
tell
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telling
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 their price loudly. Having said that ,
Such
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thing
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things
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 have a huge negative impact on other
person
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people's
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 mental health
leading
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, leading
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 to hate
about
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for
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such
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 persons.
Beside
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Besides
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 Show off, the other important fact in support of
this
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 thing to be negative is Waste of
Money
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 . People spend
huge
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a huge
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 amount of their
money
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in
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on
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 buying expensive
things
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 which are mostly
of
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apply
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not
use
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useful
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In
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in
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 their
daiy
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daily
 life .
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Furthermore
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FurtherMore
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FurtherMore,
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You
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you
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 can easily get
same
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the same
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 quality thing
in
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for
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 less
money
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 from local brands .In
Short
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Short,
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 these
things
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 are basically a waste of
money
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making
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, making
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this
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 trend
as
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apply
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negative . In
Summary
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Summary,
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 buying expensive popular
brand
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brands
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 of cars ,
wearings
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wearing
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are
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is
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 just a show off in society and
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a totally
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totally
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total
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wastage
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waste
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 of
money
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 . People should focus on other good
things
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 that can be done using
money
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 in
this
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 society .

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task response
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that shows the topic and your view. Then add body with one main idea in each para. End with a clear conclusion that repeats your view.
coherence
Make ideas flow easy. Use small linking words like first, also, but, and finally. Try to keep one idea in each paragraph and use clear order.
grammar
Use plain grammar and common spellings. Check common words, and be careful with big words. Keep sentences short and clear.
task response
The writer gives a clear view against the trend.
coherence
There is an ending that restates the view.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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