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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The table illustrates key information about the
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numbers
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 of tourists who visited Ashdown
Museum
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 before and after the refurbishments. The two pie charts compare the percentages of people's satisfaction, which were conducted by a survey.
Overall
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, it is clear from the tables that there was a significant increase in
visitors
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numbers
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 before and after the modifications.
In addition
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 ,there were varied percentages of
humans
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 happiness before and after the enhancements.
According to
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 what is shown in the table, the figures rose substantially from 74,000
person
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persons
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 to 92,000
person
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due to
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 improvements. In terms of satisfaction, the
numbers
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 of tourists enjoying and not enjoying were the same,
as
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at
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 40
percent
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per cent
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, before and after
museum
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 refurbishments.
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Furthermore
, the
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numbers
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 of people who were very satisfied after the refurbishment
were
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 roughly double
before
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 the
museum
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 development, as before 15 and after 35.
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, the dissatisfaction percentages sharply declined from 40% to 15% after the
museum
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 was changed.
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, the minority of visitors was not
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, whether before or after, which accounted for only 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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