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Influence of human beings on the world's ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. What are the causes of loss of biodiversity? What solutions can you suggest?

The environment is capable of including all the animals and birds
including
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most
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the most
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 evolved human beings.
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tremendous
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the tremendous
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 influential activities are leading to serious concerns not only
to
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for
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the
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nature but
also
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to
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for
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 the co-living species.
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 fosters the global issue
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such
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, such
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 as Global warming
and
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, and
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 sustainable living is the solution considering
present
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the present
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 scenario.
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, the extreme burning of
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fossil fuels in
this
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 demanding world
leading
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is leading
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 to
the
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serious concerns
of
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about
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 the
earth
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Earth's
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 heating.
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 is
further
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 influencing the melting of the glaciers
leading
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, leading
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 to
increase
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an increase
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 in sea level. Because of
this
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 reason, the natural habitat of animals residing
from
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for
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 centuries
are
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is
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 migrating because the temperature is increasing.
Also
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, the waste created by humans,
for example
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, plastics entering the sea,
chocked
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in
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the mouth of
marine
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the marine
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ecosystem
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ecosystem,
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leads
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leading
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 to
near-extinct
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a near-extinct
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 state. In studies, it is estimated that there is
increase
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an increase
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 in
IUCN
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the
list
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number
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animals
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of animals
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 and plants to 50%. So, it is crucial for society to utilise the naturally available resources sustainably.
Method
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Methods
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such
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 as reuse and
recycle
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recycling
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 can be implemented.
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, the usage of electric vehicles
address
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addresses
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 the fossil fuel burning problem. Planting more trees and accepting community guidelines for maintaining
the
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a
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 green and healthy society is the requirement. In 2020, 200 people bought land to plant trees as they were suffering from
Asthama
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asthma
 and serious health risks.
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 not only solved their current problems but
also
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it leads
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led
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 to the
overall
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 improvement of
air
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the air
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 quality index. In conclusion, planned execution of techniques will not only solve the global extinction but
also
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 ecosystem is improved which
ultimately
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is ultimately
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 helpful for
the
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apply
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human
being
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beings
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.

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structure
Plan before you write. Make a small plan with the parts: what causes, then what you do about it. Write a short intro and a simple end.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Put causes in one paragraph, remedies in another, and end with a short conclusion.
vocabulary
Keep to simple words. Use common words. Short and clear sentences are best.
coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next, like first, next, also, but, and finally.
accuracy
Check facts. The stat about IUCN is not clear. If you do not know, say 'some studies show' or leave it out.
content
Be precise. State the cause, then give a clear solution for each one.
grammar
Fix grammar: subject-verb, verb tenses, articles (a, the).
content
The essay keeps to the topic of biodiversity loss.
content
There is a plan to state both causes and remedies.
content
An example of tree planting is given.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ecosystem
  • extinction
  • biodiversity
  • deforestation
  • urbanization
  • contamination
  • overexploitation
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • non-native
  • safeguard
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable
  • legislation
  • rehabilitation
  • endangered species
  • conservation
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • biodiversity loss
  • ecological balance
  • sanctuary
  • environmental degradation
  • policy implementation
  • wildlife protection
  • ecotourism
  • biodiversity conservation
  • ecological footprint
  • sustainable development
  • pollinator decline
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