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-The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, technologic is a significant tool to communicate between
people
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 in whole the world, which means there are no visits or meetings between
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people
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 from the same family. I believe that social
media
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 has a lot of advantages , but at the same
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 there are
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 disadvantages. On the one hand, social
media
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 can be so useful and helpful. We can connect with
people
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 at any time, call them, and cheat with them. In
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, there is no space because we know their news and how they do.
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studed
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studied
 in Japan
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four years ago, so I
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 up with my family via WhatsApp. We were open
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video
 calls, so I did not feel only or sad,
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I feel
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am on cloud nine.
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, the big use of social
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 can impact
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. A lot of
people
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 depend on
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technology
 more, so that makes the relationship between
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weeknees
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weak
.
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, my friend does not stay and talk with her mom and dad in real life ,
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 of she always faces changes and
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difficulties
 to deal with her family.
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, we should balance between social
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 and face-to-face meetings.
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, there are many risks in the near future if we completely use social
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, so we should be
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attentive
 and do not leave our old culture, because we need to keep our strong relationship.

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Make one idea per sentence and put similar ideas together in one paragraph.
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End with a clear idea that states your view on the question.
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Shows two sides with 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.
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Gives some real life examples.
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Ends with a note to balance.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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