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Band 7.5

Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some argue that governments ought to allocate public funds to make public
transport
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 free at the point of use. I partly agree.
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 a zero-fare policy can deliver clear environmental and economic gains, a universal scheme is fiscally heavy and not always the most efficient way to improve mobility.
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 with, removing or significantly reducing
fares
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 would encourage a modal shift from private cars to buses and trains.
As a result
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, road congestion would ease and tailpipe emissions would fall, which in turn improves urban air quality and public health.
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, fare-free access can expand mobility for students, the elderly, and low-income households who might
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 be priced out of reliable
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. Beyond the environment, free public
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 may
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 yield economic benefits.
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, households would retain more disposable income, and employers could see better punctuality when buses and trains are frequent and uncrowded.
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, wider access to jobs across a city strengthens labour-market participation.
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, making every journey free is not a costless solution. Operating subsidies would rise sharply and might crowd out investment in frequency, maintenance, and network coverage—the very features that persuade people to ride. What is more, universal free travel grants the same subsidy to high-income commuters who
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 reasonably pay, which is arguably regressive. Without parallel investment in capacity, zero
fares
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 can
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 trigger overcrowding and declining service quality.
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, a more defensible compromise is targeted support: keep
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 low
overall
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, make travel free or heavily discounted for priority groups, and introduce off-peak concessions to spread demand. Crucially, governments should prioritise service quality—frequency, reliability, and cleanliness—because these factors, ultimately, determine sustained ridership more than price alone. In conclusion, I agree to an extent: governments should subsidise public
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, but smart, targeted funding is preferable to blanket free
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overall
The essay shows a good answer with a clear view and it covers both sides. To raise the score, add more exact ideas and some numbers or real details to back each point.
task response
Task response is solid. Improve it by making the final view stronger and by giving more clear steps on policy choice.
coherence
Coherence and flow are good. Keep this by using clear sign words and by making each part link well to the next.
coherence
Some ideas stay general. Use more precise examples or cases for each point to show depth.
coherence
Try shorter sentences sometimes. Long sentence can hide a joined idea. Use one idea per sentence more.
strength
Clear view that is balanced.
strength
Good use of linking words to show flow.
strength
Strong paragraph structure with a clear order.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • sustainability
  • commuters
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • accommodate
  • equitable access
  • public transportation system
  • allocating resources
  • financial burden
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