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Some people say that governments should be responsible for transporting children to school, while others believe that parents should get their children to school. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Education for children is the most important and
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integral
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the
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society. But people would argue
on
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 'who should be responsible for taking them to
school
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'. Some believe that it should be
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the goverment's
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goverment's
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government's
 responsibility to develop a transportation facility
that is
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 specially designed
for
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the take
kids
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 to
school
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 and back home safely.
While
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other
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others
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 would argue that
parents
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 are responsible for
thiers
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their
offsprings
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offspring's
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 education. I
beleive
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believe
 that it should be
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a priorty
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priorty
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priority
 for both
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a
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the
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goverment
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government
 and the
parents
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.
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Goverment
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Government
 plays
huge
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a huge
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 role in
a
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the
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 development of the upcoming generation by giving them all the basic
nessesties
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necessities
free
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, free
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 education, playgrounds and even nutritional food in some cases. All these efforts are being enforced to make the future generations healthy and skilled to serve the country. Some people
beleive
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believe
 that
goverments
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governments
 can play
major
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a major
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 role in
mobilzing
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mobilising
 as well,
specially
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especially
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 in the rural areas where access to public transport is
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difficult,
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while
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 the
parents
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 are working and do not have enough time to drop their
kids
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at
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off at
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school
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. In today's society, most of the family have both
parents
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 working
and
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, and
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 they ignore the
imprtance
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importance
 of their child's
school
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while
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emphasizing
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emphasising
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on
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their own careers.
This
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 is
major
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a major
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 growing problem in the cities
and
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, and
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should help these families
with
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by
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 providing them
relaible
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reliable
 source of commute for their
toddler's
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toddlers'
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eductions
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education
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.
School
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 buses may take hours to pick
and
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up and
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 drop off the students
which
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, which
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 would have been used somewhere else.
On the other hand
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, some people would argue that
parents
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 are as much responsible as the
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goverment
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government
 is.
Parents
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 provide the stepping stones to their
kids
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 by giving them a basic sense of
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communication
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, morals and
difference
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the difference
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 between their good and bad. Some
parents
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 use the time
while
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 transporting their children to
school
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 to talk
them
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to them
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 about
thier
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their
 everyday experiences
which
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, which
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 makes their bond stronger.
Moreover
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, it gives a kid a sense of joy and safety when they drive with their
parents
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.
Parents
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 would have
chance
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a chance
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 to meet their
kid's
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kids'
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 teachers and
freinds
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friends
 to see who they are really hanging out with.
This
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 gives them
a
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an
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oppertunity
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opportunity
 to
overview
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review
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 their
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kids
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kids'
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 company and behaviour for
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better parenting. It saves
a
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plenty of time for the student
which
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, which
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 can be used
tp
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to
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 learn new skills.
To conclude
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, children are the most crucial and
senstive
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sensitive
 part of
the
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society
and
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 it is everybody's
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to give the best possible
enviroment
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environment
 for the good
develpement
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development
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • safety and reliability
  • standardize the quality of transportation
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental pollution
  • regulation
  • trained drivers
  • well-maintained vehicles
  • flexible schedules
  • personalized care
  • parent-child relationships
  • school community
  • financial burdens
  • fuel costs
  • vehicle maintenance
  • public transport fees
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