The graph and chart below give information on the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph and chart below give information on the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The line graph and bar chart show the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius and the average number of
days
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with rainfall every month for two Australian cities.
Overall
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, the line graph followed a similar pattern in both medium and minimum daily
temperature
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in two Australian cities, albeit in
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summer
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the summer
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months
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month
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month,
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the indicators declined. The bar chart
show
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shows
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the rainy
days
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in
Brisbane
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and
Canberra
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, and the most rainy
days
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were in winter. As the line graph shows, the maximum average daily
temperature
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in
Brisbane
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started at around 27
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C
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°C
,
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;
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however
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however,
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it experienced a
sharply
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sharp
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decrease to 20
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C
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°C
in the middle of spring.
Then
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it increased gradually to 30
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C
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°C
between April and December. In
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Canberra
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Canberra,
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the maximum average daily
temperature
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started at around 26C and it witnessed a steady decrease to 10C in July,
whereas
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it grew considerably to 27C
until
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by
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end
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the end
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of the year. Coming to
minimum
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the minimum
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average daily
temperature
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, it started at around 21 and 12 ,and experienced a moderate decrease
in
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apply
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to 10C and just over 0C in the middle of
summer
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, before
rise
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rising
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substantially to 20 and 13 in December in
Brisbane
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and
Canberra
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, respectively. Regarding
bar
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the bar
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chart , the most rainy
days
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between 12 and 14 were in winter and March,
while
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the lowest rainy
days
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around 7 were
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were around 7
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in
summer
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in
Brisbane
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.
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, it witnessed the same results in May and November
with
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, with
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10 rainfall
days
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and in December and April
with
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, with
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12 rainfall
days
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. Turning to the figures of
Canberra
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, it started at 7 rainy
day
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days
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in January and it increased moderately to 10 in
summer
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. Albeit it decreed to again 7 until
end
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the end
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of the month.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words days, temperature, summer, brisbane, canberra, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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