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The map below shows the town of Sanditon Beach before and after an airport was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the town of Sanditon Beach before and after an airport was built. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting in the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given map demonstrates the changes in the current Southwest
airport
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 that will be renovated
in
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next year. The Southwest
airport
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 is now simple indeed. Upon
thewest
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the west
 side of the
contruction
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construction
, visitors can see
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the departures
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departures
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departure
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 gate
and
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, and
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 after entering inside, there are
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a check
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check in
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check-in
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 point and a cafe. For the east part, there is a
hall
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 for
arrival
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 passengers which is
pararelle
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parallel
 with the departures
hall
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. Following up
on
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north, visitors can find
secerity
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security
 passport control
and
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, and
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then
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 they can find
pathway
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a pathway
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 to reach gates number 1 to 8.
In next
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Next
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 year,
this
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 Southwest
airport
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 will
altered
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be altered
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 considerably. First of all, the departures
hall
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the
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apply
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cafe will be
move
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moved
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 from the northeast
conner
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corner
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 to
southwest
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the southwest
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conner
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corner
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 and its place will be the
check in
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check-in
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 point
instead
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. For
arrival
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the arrival
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hall
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, the main development that took place is the introduction of
new
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a new
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 cafe, ATM, and car hire station.
In addition
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, another
shops
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shop
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 will be built in the area beforereach to the sky train station
which
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, which
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 will be another major development. The final transformation not only
introduction
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introduces
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 of new sky train system, but
also
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expansion of
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expands
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 the number of
gates
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gates,
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that
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which
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 will be increased from 8 to 18 gates.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
airport
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 will be redeveloped into
more
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a more
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accessiable
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accessible
with
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one with
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 new public transportation and
also
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 be more
convinnence
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convenient
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, hall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • airport
  • built
  • beach
  • houses
  • shops
  • facilities
  • expanded
  • tourism
  • construction
  • roads
  • access
  • travelers
  • population
  • developed
  • job opportunities
  • residential area
  • quiet
  • bustling
  • visitors
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