The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The graph illustrates the
number
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of shop
closures
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and openings in one country over the period 2011–2018.
Overall
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, the
number
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of shops that opened declined sharply,
while
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closures
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fluctuated but
also
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ended the period lower than their initial level.
Although
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openings were consistently higher than
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in the early years,
this
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pattern reversed after 2012. In 2011, about 8,500 shops opened, the highest level shown on the chart,
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closures
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stood at around 6,200. Openings
then
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fell by more than half to 4,000 in 2012 and remained below
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for most of the period. After a temporary recovery to about 6,200 in 2014, the
number
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of new shops fluctuated
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before dropping to only 2,000 in 2018.
Closures
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showed a different trend. After a slight fall in 2012, they peaked at 7,100 in 2013,
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dropped dramatically to just 700 in 2015.
Following
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this
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sharp decline, the
number
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of
closures
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rose again, reaching around 5,200 in the final year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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