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Band 3

Supermarkets should only sell food produced within their own country. What are your opinions about it?

Covenient
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Convenient
 stores should solely sell
food
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 made in their country. I disagree with it for two main reasons
:
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 it is biologically good for the plant and people ,and it increases individuals'
choices
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 to choose what they want to purchase. In some
moment
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moments
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 of the year
that
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when
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 some products cannot be made or grown agriculturally, imported
stuffs
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goods
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 can be used to
reach
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meet
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 the demands of people.
Additionally
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,
this
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 can
reduced
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reduce
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the uses
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uses
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use
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 of chemical
fertilizers
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fertilisers
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 to cultivate off-season plants
which
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, which
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 can harm directly to the plants and people who consume
it
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them
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.
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, many
farmer
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farmers
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 in Thailand use harmful
fertilizers
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fertilisers
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 to grow
corns
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corn
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, which is
a
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an
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 off-season crop in
winter
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the winter
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 season, to fill the needs of individuals. Each
of
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apply
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customers
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customer
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 has different preferences, so giving one
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a choices
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choices
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choice
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 to buy in-country or imported foods will benefit both shop owners and customers as the purchaser
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is willingly
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willingly
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willing
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 to buy what they look for. If the sellers give a person plenty of
choices
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, they often find their desired products.
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, in Thailand, a store that offers a lot of local and international
food
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choices
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 gains more customers compared to
the
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a
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 local
alone
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apply
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food
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 shop. In conclusion,
supermakets
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supermarkets
 that sell
food
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 from their own country and outside of the country can support the wellness of plants and humans and give more
choices
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 to their shoppers.

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grammar
Fix spelling and big grammar errors. Check how you use verbs and plural. For example, convenient, farmers, corn, off-season, etc.
organization
Plan before you write. Start with your view. Then give two clear ideas in small paragraphs, and end with a short finish.
vocabulary
Use only easy words. Do not use hard or new words.
examples
Give one clear example for each reason and say why it matters.
task response
Answer the task clearly. Say why you disagree and what you think should happen.
content
Clear stance at the start.
example
One real example about Thailand is used.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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