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The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.

The table below shows population figures for 4 countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050.
The table illustrates the
population
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 of four countries (Argentina, Indonesia, Italy, and the Republic of Korea) in 2003, with projections for 2025 and 2050.
Overall
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, Indonesia
had
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 and will continue to have the largest
population
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,
while
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 Italy is the only country expected to show a decline over the period. Argentina and Korea,
by contrast
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, are projected to see moderate growth. In 2003, Indonesia’s
population
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 was 238
million
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, the highest among the four.
This
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 figure is forecast to increase significantly, reaching 274
million
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 in 2025 and 312
million
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 in 2050. Argentina is expected to nearly double its
population
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 from 34
million
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 in 2003 to 62
million
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 in 2050.
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, Italy will experience a decline, falling from 54
million
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 in 2003 to 47
million
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 in 2025, and
further
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 to 45
million
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 in 2050. Meanwhile, the Republic of Korea’s
population
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 will rise slightly from 48
million
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 in 2003 to 52
million
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 in 2025, before
stabilizing
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stabilising
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 at that level in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • country
  • people
  • year
  • in
  • 2003
  • 2025
  • 2050
  • the most
  • the least
  • more
  • less
  • grow
  • rise
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • change
  • trend
  • compare
  • differences
  • similar
  • different
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • small
  • gap
  • lead
  • top
  • bottom
  • by
  • and
  • but
  • however
  • while
  • whereas
  • also
  • overall
  • conclusion
  • plan
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