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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some say that news has no connection with most of people’s life and it is a waste of time for most of us to read newspapers and watch telelivision news programs. Do you agree or disagree?

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 exists,among teenagers and youngsters,there have a hot debate on the importance of whether reading
news
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 from newspapers and
telivision
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television
new
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news
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 programs is worth
to waste
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 our time and whether it's connected to people's daily
life
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.From my
perspective
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, I think
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reading
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some worldwide
news
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definetely
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definitely
 useful. Quite a few factors,as a matter of fact,could account for my opinions.As the primary element,
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 attention to daily
life
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news
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 could know more
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globle
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about the global
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 situation and develop our ability
of
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 catch key points and
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globle
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a global
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perspective
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.In
this
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 epoch,there
have
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are
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 many social
medias
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media
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 blocked serious domestic and
forign
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foreign
news
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.
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,if somewhere appeared serious murder
news
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,to prevent
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apply
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public afraid about society,
these
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news
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always
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be
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blocked.
In
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another
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hand
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other hand
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,some
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in
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government
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 level
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also
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be
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cut down to spread.But for us,to know about these safety questions and
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globle
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global
 relationship,we should use many
convienient
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convenient
 social media to care about these,it can cultivate our international
perspective
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 and awareness of
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ourselves
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 safety. What's more,all authentic
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are
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is more
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 practical and true than the
news
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 from
another
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 tubes.All of
news
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are
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 from our daily
life
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 and must
related
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be related
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 to us.
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,some
enviroment
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environmental
news
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 need
reporter
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arrived
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to arrive
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 real place to
reporting
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,in
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. In
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 typhoon
wheather
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weather
,even though
its
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it's
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 windy and rainy,but to expressed practical and warning,
reporter
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reporters
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 always
talking
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 in the pouring
situation
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. In summary,
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using
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 time to read
news
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 from different ways
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such
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 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
telivision
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television
news
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programs
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program
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program,
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 is crucial to our daily
life
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,
its
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it
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 not only
can develop
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 our awareness of
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globle
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a global
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perspective
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 but
also
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cultivate
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cultivates
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 our ability
of
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to
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 protect our safety.

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task
Task response: You show a view and give some reason. You should add more clear steps and a stronger final point to show your full view.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear start for each paragraph. Link ideas with small words. Make sure each idea fits the task.
strength
The essay shows a clear view and some reasons.
structure
There is a plan: intro, body, and end, even if weak.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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