The charts below show changes in the age structure of the population of a European country between 1901 and 1981 and a prediction for 2021

The charts below show changes in the age structure of the population of a European country between 1901 and 1981 and a prediction for 2021
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show changes in the age structure of the population of a European country between 1901 and 1981 and a prediction for 2021
The pie charts demonstrate the various changes in the proportion of different
age
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group
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groups
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in European
country
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countries
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between 1901 and 1981
and
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a projection of 2021. A glance at the pie charts reveals that the quantity of people in the
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range of 0 to 65
rank
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ranks
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first
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those aged over 85 had a tiny percentage. It is crystal clear that the proportion of all
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group
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groups
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have
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a
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same
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from 1901 to 1941. The 0-65
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group
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had 95%
while
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the over 85
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group
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had a tiny proportion of 1% and 4% other
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. In comparison, the
number of
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total population in 1901 was higher than that in
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1941,
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with nearly 38 million and 52 million
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, respectively
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. The most noticeable is that there was a significant rise in 65-to-85-year-old-people by a tenth to 13% . In comparison, the percentage of the 0-65
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was 21 times that
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those aged over 85
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83% and 4% respectively. It is estimated that the
number of
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total population will rise dramatically from 67 to 87.5 million . The 0-65
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is forecast to have decreased to nearly
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. The prediction
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reveals that the over 85
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and those aged 65 to 85 will see a minimal rise to 6% and 15% respectively. In conclusion, the 0-65
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group
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always rank first
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the over 85 always has the lowest percentage.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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