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Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transportation system such as railway and trains. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Some individuals believe that spending money on
roads
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 and motorways is more important than improving the public transportation system. In my view, public
transport
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 is a better option for governments to invest in, for reasons which I will outline in the following essay.
To begin
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roads
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 and motorways can help reduce traffic congestion and make travel more convenient for drivers.
In addition
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, once new
roads
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 are built, they generally do not require frequent repairs, which may save maintenance costs in the long term.
Furthermore
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, since the majority of families own private vehicles, investing in
roads
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 might seem more beneficial for a large part of the population.
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, in the UK, more than 80% of households own cars and rarely use public
transport
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, so they may feel that taxes spent on trains or buses are wasted.
On the other hand
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, public
transport
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 is essential for people who cannot rely on private cars. Students,
for instance
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, often do not have enough money to buy or maintain a vehicle.
Similarly
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, individuals who lack a driver’s licence, either because of health issues or limited resources, depend entirely on public
transport
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.
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, in my home
country
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country,
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 Ukraine, more than 90% of high school students use buses or trams to travel to school. For these groups, public
transport
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 is not just an alternative but the only available option. In conclusion,
while
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 investing in
roads
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 and motorways can benefit car owners and reduce traffic jams, public transportation is too important for many groups of people to be neglected. On balance, I believe governments should prioritise funding for public
transport
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 to ensure equal access and sustainable urban development.

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balance
Your view is clear but the piece could show more of the other side too.
evidence
Add some proof or fact to support the points.
coherence
Link ideas well. Start each paragraph with a clear idea and end with a line that ties back to your view.
language
Use simple words and short sentences to keep the load light.
structure
Finish with a short last idea to cap the essay.
strength
Clear view that public transport matters a lot.
structure
Good use of contrast words to show different points.
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