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These days,many university courses are offered through the internet,some people think that the online teaching has more advantage than conventional classroom teaching or lectures while others claimed there are significant disadvantages Do the benefits of online teaching outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Nowadays, some people
belived
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believe
 that
teching
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teaching
 in the
class room
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classroom
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 is more conventional
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than then
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then
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the
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internet
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, and
other
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others
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are claimed
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claim
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 that online teaching is
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an advantege
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advantege
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advantage
by
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for
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 the university. There are significant
dreoback
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drawbacks
 and
benifiets
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benefits
 of
the
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both
side
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. I
stongly belived
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strongly believe
that
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students
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 are more
confortabley
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comfortable
work
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working
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 in class
room
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classroom
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comparie
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compared
 to
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internet
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the internet
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.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, Online
study
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 is popular in most of the contry after
the covid
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COVID-19
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. Some people
belived
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believe
 that online
study
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 and
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internet
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the internet
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 are more
benifisial
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beneficial
 for
students
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. They
study
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of
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on
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 their own time and
also
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 they have
option
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the option
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 to the teachers.
chidren
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Children
 have time for their
study
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 and other
activies
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activities
 too. Like, they can do
another
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other
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leaisure
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leisure
 activities which
is
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are
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 more
intresting
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interesting
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then
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than
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study
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studying
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.
For example
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,
childerns
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children
do playing
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play
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 cricket or other things
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also
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, also
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participeting
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participating
 in games.
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students
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Students
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 are
leanring
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learning
 from different platforms
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 new websites
or
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, or
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use
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using
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 new platforms
also
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use
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also use
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 new
tecnique
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techniques
 to learn from the
veriety
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variety
 of
the
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apply
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learners. Some parents are not
affored
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afforded
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schools
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school
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 fees that can be very high for some of them.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
Internet
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 learning is
harm
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harmful
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 for the
childrens
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children
, they do not learn aesthetics and
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discipline
to
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in
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the
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apply
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socity
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society
.
Although
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,
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 they can not
sociel
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socialise
 with everyone, in
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schools
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schools,
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 kids are learning many things from their teachers
and
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, and
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 they
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are laerning
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laerning
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learning
 public relations. In
school
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school,
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 they take part in the
activies
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activities
 and learn
compitive spiriets
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competitive spirits
.
Even
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apply
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,
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apply
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they
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They
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meet
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even meet
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 new
students
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 and make friends.
University
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Universities
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 and
schools
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 are learn so many things,
students
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are developed
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develop
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 their
mantal
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mental
health
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apply
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and physical health.
Conclusion
In my opinion,
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schools
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apply
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university
couorse
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courses
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are benifical
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benifical
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beneficial
 for
students
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 for their mental growth and
devlopment
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development
 of the future.

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language
Use clear and simple sentences. Fix spelling and grammar so it is easy to read.
task
State your view in a clear line at the start. Then give 2-3 reasons with one simple example each.
structure
Make the plan steady: intro, two body parts, and a short end. Link parts with easy words.
content
The writer has ideas on both sides of the topic.
content
There are examples of study at home and on line use.
perspective
The writer shows a main view and a stand.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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