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Some people believe that technology has made our lives more complicated, while others think it has made life easier. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many People believe that our
technology
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 has made our
lives
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 more complicated for them,
while
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 others think it has made life easier because
technology
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 can help them
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anyway
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,
lest
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let's
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 talk about people who believe
technology
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 can help them and
made
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them
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their
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life
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lives
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 easier. In 2025, we see how
technology
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develop
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develops
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more
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faster than before, specifically AI, everything seems faster.
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 a
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glance,
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 AI have
new
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a new
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 feature, we can talk to AI, we can discuss, we can
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tell
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stories and
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 ask for advice. Everyone feels help, a student, a CEO, a worker, a teacher, or even a mom feels help with AI in their
lives
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.
While
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 others think that
technology
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 has made their
lives
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 more complicated, I guess, it could be because they cannot adapt
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innovation
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innovations
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who
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that
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 develop so
faster
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quickly
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. We know in a blink
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come
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 faster and we must learn
for
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it
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to use it
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its
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It
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take
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takes
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a
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time to understand the new
technology
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, but when we can use
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it properly
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,
its
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it
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 will help us. Or I think because AI
bother
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bores
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 their work, a painter or an
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illustrator
 who can
change
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be replaced
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 by AI. They feel AI is not fair. But
in
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on
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the others
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others
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other
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 hand, several
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illustrators
 mull over, and AI
it
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can help their job to earn money easier, is not 100% by AI, by AI
can
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cannot
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 give them advice
to
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apply
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. The conclusion is,
Technology
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develop
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develops
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more
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apply
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faster, and some people have trouble with the
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rhythm
. But in
this
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 generation, if we cannot take advantage of it, it will be more difficult
to
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 our
lives
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. So in my opinion, I reckon the
technology
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is
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really
help
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helps
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 our
lives
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Use a clear plan. State your view in the intro, say both sides, then give your own view in a short conclusion. Separate ideas into two or three clear parts.
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Make a simple, tight paragraph for each idea. Start with a topic sentence, then add a short reason and a tiny example.
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Prefer short, plain sentences. Check the tense and spellings. Use linking words like and, but, also, however to join ideas.
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Use simple examples that fit the topic. Even small real life examples can help.
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Try to use mainly common words from the top 100 words so your voice stays clear.
strength
The essay shows an attempt to talk about both sides and ends with a view.
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There is a clear use of current tech topics like AI.
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The writer makes a clear final opinion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • simplify
  • enhance
  • automation
  • telemedicine
  • connectivity
  • overwhelm
  • information overload
  • superficial
  • decision-making
  • stress
  • frustration
  • efficiency
  • advanced technology
  • smart devices
  • relationships
  • health outcomes
  • convenience
  • isolation
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