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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

It is argued that in the near future, vehicles will be without human beings to drive them, and only passengers will be inside.
This
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 essay completely disagrees with the statement because driverless
cars
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 will
be not
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not be
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 aware of the risks that
infornt
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are in front
 of
it
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them
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 and the development of events
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such
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, such
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 as
ill
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an ill
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person
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person,
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 is not safe in
cars
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 without
some
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someone
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one
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 to drive. On the
one
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 hand, the road always
have
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has
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 unexpected events or
damges
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damages
.
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 some roads
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are
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safe
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safe,
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 there
always will
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will always
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 be something we are not aware
that
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of that
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 will face you
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such
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, such
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 as rocks, accidents and animals, which
resuilted
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results
as
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in
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 a
dangers
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dangerous
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 drive
to
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for
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 the passenger.
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, a recent study showed that
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Tesla
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cars
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make
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pose
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 a 40
percent
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per cent
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of dangers
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risk
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 to the
people
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 who use
it
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them
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 are afraid that something
happen
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will happen
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 to them and there
no
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is no
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one
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 in the car
will
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who will
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 help them. Which makes the person feel anxious and
stress
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all
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apply
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the
ride
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whole ride
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. That
because
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is because
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 there
some
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are some
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people
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 who
is
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are
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 sick and without any warning they will
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faint
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 and there
no
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one
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 to help them.
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, Oxford
Universtiy
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University
 show that a man with
dibetaes
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diabetes
 fell into a coma
becuase
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because
 of
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a driveless
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driveless
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driverless
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 car.
some
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Some
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people
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 right now have some
debutes
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debates
 about the new
develop
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development
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 of
the
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apply
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cars
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 and buses. In conclusion, the development of the new
vechiles
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vehicles
 is a good thing for
people
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but
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, but
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 the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
the
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The
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driveless
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driverless
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cars
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 are not safe for all
the
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apply
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people
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.

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task response
Answer the question with a clear view. Add 2 clear ideas and explain them with simple facts or ideas.
structure
Use one main idea per paragraph and explain it. Start with a topic sentence and then add why it matters.
coherence
Link ideas with simple phrases like also, but, so, however. Check the flow from one sentence to the next.
content
Check facts. If you use a fact, make it true or say it as a guess with a note like 'some say' or 'research shows'.
structure
Clear stance is shown in the start and end of the essay.
coherence
The writer uses two sides with 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand'.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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