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Some people like to try new things for example place to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing thing they are familer with. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People
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 around the world vary in their approach to new experiences; some prefer experiencing
things
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 they are familiar with,
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 others like to try new
things
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, like visiting tourist hot spots or trending restaurants.
This
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 essay will discuss both personality types with suitable examples. In general, individuals who love to try new
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 are like
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 because they have a wider view
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 life than other
people
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 who are too scared to do
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 because they are afraid of being rejected or pushed away.
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, they stay enclosed in their world and don't learn about new cultures, try new foods, or see extraordinary views of luscious mountains and forests.
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, they gain better views of the world and a better understanding of
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.
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, some
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 like to enjoy
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 they are accustomed to, like sitting in the comfort of their homes, "rotting away" with the same
people
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 they met 10 years ago, and
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 not putting in the effort to do
things
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. These
people
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also
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 don't like taking risks; they like playing it safe and not branching out. One way to solve
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 is
finding
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 a balance between these two approaches, taking small steps for the greater good.
This
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 leads to better life choices and enjoyment in the end. Ultimately, the choice is up to the person. Some will take
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 advice
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 others will ignore it. You can't force
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 into new
things
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; maybe it's for the better.
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 life is not for everyone.

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task response
Make your position clear in the opening sentence and restate it in the conclusion. This helps the reader know your view quickly.
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Tell each view with more detail and give concrete examples or situations to support your point.
coherence cohesion
Use more clear topic sentences at the start of each paragraph to show the main idea.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas with simple, natural connectors and avoid very informal phrases. Keep the tone steady.
language
Check your word choice and keep to simple, common words. Basic grammar and punctuation will help.
content
The essay mentions both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Some linking words are used to show progression.
content
The writing shows an attempt to give a personal view.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • try
  • new
  • things
  • places
  • visit
  • food
  • familiar
  • keep
  • doing
  • people
  • view
  • opinion
  • discuss
  • benefit
  • advantage
  • risk
  • safety
  • comfort
  • money
  • time
  • memory
  • growth
  • learn
  • culture
  • adventure
  • change
  • plan
  • balance
  • moderation
  • approach
  • choice
  • option
  • opportunity
  • experience
  • curious
  • open
  • minded
  • confident
  • skill
  • improve
  • deep
  • practice
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