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One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with it?

In recent years, the main problems that arise from developing countries are the crowded of
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population
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the population
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. The quality of life for the individuals that
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from
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by
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 accessibility to the facilities, resources, and education.
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, in
the
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countries that
lacking
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lack the ability
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 to manage overpopulation issues make their rights
unequal
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are unequal
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. The unpredictable circumstances of birth in some countries
,
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apply
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 cause the
government
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 not
have
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to have
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 a preventive solution to
held
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address
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 it. The
over immortality
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overimmortality
 without
the
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further
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 planning can
driven
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lead
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 to
worst
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a worst
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 situation,
for
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instance
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instance,
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 limited resources like food
,
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apply
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 and
education
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apply
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access for individuals.
This
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 situation
make
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makes
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 the individual have unqualified skills to stand in
current
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the current
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 evolving
, and
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environment, and
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 the opportunity
for
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to
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 get
the
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a
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 better life more competitive. Afterwards,
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this
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these
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 issues
probably
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are probably
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 impacting
to
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the quality of the country itself.
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,
involving
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 of
government
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 roles
are
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is
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 important to take care to avoid the negative impacts. The obvious regulation
take
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takes
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the
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significant
affects
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effects
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 to mitigate the crowded
population
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. Rules to regulate the time distance of birth in some
family
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families
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,
number
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the number
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 of
child
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children
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, and
others
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other
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 systems to make
even
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an even
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 distribution of
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population
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the population
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.
To conclude
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, the over of individuals in some areas can give
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apply
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drawbacks for the country and
their self
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itself
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,
due to
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 the gap
of
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in
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regulation
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regulatory
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 systems.
Particulary
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Particularly
the
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, the
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involment
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involvement
 of
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government
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the government
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 to create the right rules and concrete
are
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measures is
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 essential.
In addition
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,
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 to monitoring and
forecast
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forecasting
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 number of
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population
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population,
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 the
government
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 need to
do
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conduct
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the
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apply
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regular
survey
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surveys
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 to amount of people.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overpopulation
  • scarcity
  • urbanization
  • biodiversity
  • pollution
  • healthcare systems
  • unemployment
  • underemployment
  • social instability
  • resource competition
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