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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter explain why you think you would be suitable for the job say what else you could do for the family give your reasons for wanting the job

Dear Sir, I am a long-standing Indian citizen, and I am writing to inform you that I am interested in teaching your children my national language for a year. To talk about my experience, I have been teaching
Hindi
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 language professionally for the past 2 years. With that, I am
also
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 pursuing my PHD in
Hindi
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 literature from
renowned
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a renowned
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 university in Gujarat. The reason I am the best fit candidate is that I have been teaching the same age group of kids for the
last
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 2 years.
In addition
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 to that, as I have vast knowledge of
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Hindi
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the Hindi
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 language and Indian culture, I would love to teach colloquial words and provide
Hindi
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 movies with subtitles for you and your family to make the learning more enjoyable. At
last
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,
this
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 tutoring job would work towards my PHD's final year internship program , and I have been planning to settle in Australia for my future endeavours for so long ;
hence
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, I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you select my application. I anticipate waiting for your positive response at the earliest. Yours faithfully, Ketul Shah

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structure
Check the order of ideas. Start with a clear goal, then your work details, then how you will help the family, and finish with why you want the job.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in form and use simple words. For example, PhD instead of PHD, and 'look forward to hearing from you soon' as a closing.
content
Make each paragraph hold one main idea. Keep sentences short and clear.
content
You show a real wish to teach and help the family.
content
You offer extra ideas, like subtitles for Hindi films, to help learning.
tone
Polite and formal tone is good for a job letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • TESOL certification
  • Experience in teaching children
  • Knowledge of Australian culture
  • Passion for language education
  • Flexible and adaptable
  • Design customized lesson plans
  • Patient and understanding
  • Strong communication skills
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Participate in family activities
  • Enthusiasm for cultural exchange
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