Many students do part-time work while they are studying. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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to collect money and they are spending the time
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beneficial
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disadvantages like they feeling poring ,
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time with sad
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friends
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dinner or lunch,
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weakness
Speak clear on the point. Say if the good part is more than the bad part, and give one or two clear reasons.
structure
Put a short opening line and a short ending.
linking
Use linking words to join ideas, like first, also, but, and then.
examples
Give at least one real example from study or life.
grammar
Check simple spelling and use simple grammar.
idea
The idea of money help is shown.
balance
The writer tries to show both side of the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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