The charts illustrate how water is used in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The charts illustrate how water is used in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts illustrate how water is used in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The pie charts depict for what
purpose
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the
water
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is being used in different regions.
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, mostly
water
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usage is observed for
the
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agricultural purposes, followed by industries and
lastly
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for household usage. The
people
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utilization
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utilisation
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of
water
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is highest in
San
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Diego County at almost
two-third
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two-thirds
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of
total
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the total
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whereas
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it declined to one-third for
California
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and
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almost
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negligible if considered globally.
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, farming activities require less quantity for
San
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Diegao
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Diego
and increasing
further
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for
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california
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California
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and highest if taken into consideration at
global
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the global
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level.
Water
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need is
same
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the same
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for both
San
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Diego and Worldwide
but
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California
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itself require one-third of the total
water
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requirement for the state. Notably, the
water
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usage is higher for cultivation
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purpose
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purposes
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. In
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san
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San
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Diego
county
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County
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, 60% is for Residential
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purpose
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purposes
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and 23% is for industry and 17 % for agriculture. In
California
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, there is almost equal sharing
between
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all
the
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three
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purpose
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purposes
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. At
Global
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the Global
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level, most of the
water
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need
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needs
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is
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are
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for
agriclture
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agriculture
,
near to
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nearly
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one-fourth for industries and
near to
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nearly
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one-tenth for
household
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households
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words purpose, water, san, california with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water
  • use
  • home
  • garden
  • farm
  • world
  • city
  • share
  • percent
  • amount
  • more
  • less
  • same
  • different
  • increase
  • decrease
  • rise
  • fall
  • outdoor
  • indoor
  • farming
  • industry
  • climate
  • drought
  • save
  • water-saving
  • policy
  • reason
  • pattern
  • chart
  • diagram
  • compare
  • contrast
  • two
  • both
  • overall
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