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the diagrams below show the public liberary now and 20 yeras ago.

the diagrams below show the public liberary now and 20 yeras ago.
The diagrams provide key
in formation
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information
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 about the differences
occurred
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that occurred
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 in the public library layouts between 20 years ago and nowadays.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that changed touched indoors buildings, without any changes in the entrance. In
term
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terms
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 of
old
Correct article usage
the old
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 layout, there were two tables in the
central
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centre
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 of
library
Correct article usage
the library
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, which
located
Verb problem
were located
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 between
Adult
Correct article usage
the Adult
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 fiction books.
Also
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 Children's books was place in the Northeast, just in opposite side of kids resources.
In addition
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 , the south area
consist
Correct subject-verb agreement
consists
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 of two main buildings,
Enquiry
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the Enquiry
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 desk on the right side, and
reading
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the reading
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 room adjacent to it.
According to
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 the recent library,
immense
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an immense
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 transformation occurred in it,
such
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 as
elimination
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the elimination
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 of Table chairs,
Enquiry
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the Enquiry
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 desk replaced with
Café
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a Café
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.
Also
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 Computer room becomes in the reading room, after remove it. The
substantially
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substantial
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 change is constructed of
self
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self-service
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 machines in
central
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the central
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 region, just next to
information
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the information
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 desk.
Finally
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, the lecture and story rooms
,
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apply
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 give
in
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apply
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a place
of
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for
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children's
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children
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 and computer rooms.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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