Some people think university students should only focus on one particular study area. Others. However, others believe they should be encouraged to study a wide variety of subjects. Discuss both views and mention your own opinion.

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prefer
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area and
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believe it is good to discover other parts. Some people
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variety
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would make a good future for
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I agree that discovering other area help
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, a recent study shows most of the workers with high buy are people with so much knowledge, talents and
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experience
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who fail is because of the stress and anxiety of too
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to study. I believe that most of the
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of the pressure that
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with the benefits of studying different topics.
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, Oxford University illustrate that many
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or the job they want and
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because
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to discover more
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they are not confident about the burden that
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, many
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stay with their area of study without trying or
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encouraging
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themselves to experience new areas or fields.

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task response
Be clear about your view in the essay. State your opinion in the first paragraph and stick to it. Then talk about both sides with clear links. Use one or two strong examples to back up your point.
coherence and cohesion
Make the flow between ideas better. Use a topic sentence for each paragraph. Use simple links like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'however'. Keep sentences short and easy to read.
task response
The essay shows some effort to discuss both sides of the issue.
coherence and cohesion
There is a basic sense of structure, with a beginning and a closing idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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