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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The diagrams provide key information about the differences
occurred
Correct pronoun usage
that occurred
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 in the central library layouts between 20 years ago and
a
Correct article usage
apply
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nowadays.
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that changes touched indoors buildings,
while
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 the entrance stayed the same. In
term
Fix the agreement mistake
terms
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 of
old
Correct article usage
the old
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 layout, there were two tables in the
central
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centre
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 of
library
Correct article usage
the library
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, which
located
Verb problem
were located
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 between
Adult
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the Adult
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 fiction books.
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Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 Children's books
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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place
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placed
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 in the Northeast, just
in
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on
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opposite
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the opposite
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 side of
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the kids
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kids
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kids'
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resources
Fix the agreement mistake
resource
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 rooms.
In addition
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, the south area consists of two buildings,
Enquiry
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an Enquiry
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 desk on the right side, and
reading
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a reading
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 room obverse to it.
According to
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 the library today,
immense
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an immense
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 transformation
occurred
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has occurred
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 in it,
such
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 as
an
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the
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 elimination of Table chairs, Enquiry desk
replaced
Verb problem
has been replaced
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 with
Café
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a Café
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.
Also
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 Computer room exchange
by
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with
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reading
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the reading
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 room, after
remove
Wrong verb form
removing
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 it. The
substantially
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substantial
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 change is constructed of
self-machines
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self-machine
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 devices in the right central region, just next to
information
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the information
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 desk.
Finally
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, the lecture and story rooms give in a place
of
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to
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 children's and computer rooms.

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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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