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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table below displays social and economic signs for Canada,
Japan
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, Peru and
Zaire
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 in the year 1994, based on United Nations statistics.
Overall
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,
Japan
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 had both the highest annual income per
person
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 and the highest life expectancy at birth,
whereas
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Zaire
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 had the lowest statistics in every category included. In detail,
Japan
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's residents received the highest amount of money in 1994, with $15760 per
person
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, 120 times greater than
Zaire
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's.
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 Canada ranks second with $11,100 per
person
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 and has the highest daily calorie supply at 3,326 calories per
person
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, both countries share a 99% adult literacy rate, and the other categories are nearly identical to
Japan
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's. And nearly the same life expectancy at birth, with 76 in Canada and 78 in
Japan
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.
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, Peru's and
Zaire
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's statistics were relatively the same, with
Zaire
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the lowest. Peru had double the adult literacy rate of
Zaire
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, with 68% and 34%, respectively.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, zaire, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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