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The maps show the development of the Queen Mary Hospital following the building's conceptualization in 1960.

The maps show the development of the Queen Mary Hospital following the building's conceptualization in 1960.
1. The maps illustrate
progress
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the progress
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 of
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the
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place that took part
at
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in
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 Queen Mary
Hospitable
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Hospital
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 after
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the conceptions
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conceptions
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conception
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 of
building
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the building
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 in 1960. 2.
Overall
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,the comparison between
three
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the three
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 maps reveals a
drammatical
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dramatic
 change that turned a public
area
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to
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into
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 a
medical oriented
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medical-oriented
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 location. 3. In 1960,
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Centre
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the Centre
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 was available for every person since
they
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it
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 had
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
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 and
farmland
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a farmland
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 that
suits for
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suited
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 every condition.
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Area
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The area
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 had been viable
,
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;
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moreover
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moreover,
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 in 1980 town experienced
makeover
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a makeover
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 that slowly sculpted
hospital
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the hospital
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 residence.
Mall
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The mall
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 was replaced
to
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by
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 a
cancer
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centre
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at
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on
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 the left of
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cancer
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the cancer
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laboratory
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laboratory,
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had
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which was
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 taken
by
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over by
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pharmacy
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the pharmacy
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.Farmland
that
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apply
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located at the corner of
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area
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the area
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had
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has been
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 changed into
nursing
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a nursing
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 school.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
the
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, the
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 Hospital and Car park stayed in one position during reconstruction.After 40 years infrastructure of
popular
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a popular
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 place had turned into
medical
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a medical
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centre
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.The most noticeable feature is that
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cancer
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the cancer
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centre
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 experienced huge changes in
2000
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2000,
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 the reason is that
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centre
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the centre
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 increased in size and became the biggest building at Queen Mary.The school and parking
area
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 changed significantly,because it
is
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has
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 become a part of the
cancer
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centre
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 project.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, centre, cancer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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