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1. The map shows the library both now and in the past.

1. The map shows the library both now and in the past.
1. The map depicts
library
Correct article usage
the library
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 at the past and present time. 2.
Overall
Linking Words
,the comparison between
two
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the two
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 maps demonstrates changes that turned
private
Correct article usage
a private
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 bookstore
to
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into
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 a public cafe now. 3. In 2000,the place was only for artistic individuals
Linking Words
Punctuation problem
; moreover
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moreover
Punctuation problem
moreover,
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 nowadays it is changing to a public one.Bookshop presents
travel
Correct article usage
the travel
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 area
at
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on
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 the right,New books at the bottom of it and a service desk for employees at the bottom .On the right of the new
books
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books,
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they
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 are 3 different
interest
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interests
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 as art,hobbies and
cookery
Punctuation problem
cookery,
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 that located
on
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in
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 the
center
Use the right word
centre
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 of
book
Correct article usage
the book
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 shop.At the
top
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top,
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they
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there
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 are two large fiction
area
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areas
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.In comparison with 2000 library has experienced huge differences.
For
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example
Add a comma
example,
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 after 25 years non
fiction
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non-fiction
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 places at the
center
Use the right word
centre
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 of
library
Correct article usage
the library
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 were
specialized
Use the right word
specialised
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 for cafe interior.Fiction becomes minuscule
at
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as
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the
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a
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 result of new sectors
came
Wrong verb form
coming
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 next to it.Other majors as
thravel
Correct your spelling
travel
,new books,
service
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and service
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desk
Punctuation problem
desk,
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 hadn’t experienced any change.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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