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The following plans show recent archaeological findings at a historic site in the year 2004 and 2014.

The two maps illustrate the main changes, which include been construction of a new facility in a historic
site
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 between 2004 and 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the historical
site
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 has added more facilities,
such
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 as an ancient palace, stadium and toilet
over
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since
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 2014. In 2004, the sea was situated in the west, and the ancient temple was on the sea’s coastline in the south. The mountains were on the north side. The ancient
houses
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 were between the sea’s coastline and the mountains. The green area was located in the north. In 2014, the sea and the ancient temple remained unchanged. The ancient
houses
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 were added to a lot of
houses
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. The ancient palace was built on the southern
site
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 and among green areas and an ancient temple. The new stadium was constructed
instead
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 of one of the three trees that were cut down. The toilet was built for men and women in the north
site
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 between the ancient stadium and
houses
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.

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task
Try to fix the not right words. Use one idea per sentence and link them with simple words like first, then, and finally.
coherence
Make a short start. Say what the map shows and the main changes in two lines. Then add the details in order.
grammar
Check the grammar. Use present tense for what the map shows now and past tense for what was there in 2004. Use small words.
content
You give a clear idea that the site grows with new builds.
structure
You name things that change, like palace and stadium.

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