Children are facing more pressures from academic, social and commercial sources. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce it?
their society, learning system and commercial sources. One factor
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produced by
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dilemma
amoung
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among
the children is the
abcent
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absence
of parents and
role
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their role
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in educating their kids about
stress
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the stress
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they may face in their academic journey and social life.
Other
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reason
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lead to
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problem is that
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the comuniety
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comuniety
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community
practice
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practices
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silence on
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the entertainement
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entertainement industy
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entertainment industry
that
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wich
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result
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annexity
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anxiety
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depression
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grammar and vocabulary
Fix simple spell errors and use the right words. For example, external, among, absent, industry, entertainment, anxiety, depression.
structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a small intro, then two body parts on causes and a short ending.
task response
Say what to do to cut pressure. Add at least two ideas for measures and give a small example.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
lexical
Keep words in the top 100 list. Use simple words only.
content
The topic is clear and the essay talks about causes.
content
The writer lists more than one source of pressure.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported.After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
In recent years, climate change has been a major threat to people and this has increased rapidly. This essay will highlight that the biggest problem of global warming is the flooding of coastal regions and cities resulting in the displacement of millions of people and causing property damage. Building of barriers will help curb this situation.
It is true that these days, a significant number of citizens prefer to work as self-employed instead of working in a company or organisation. In this essay, I will offer a possible reason for this trend and go on to set out its principal drawbacks.
Spending quality time on violent leisure programs for children has become one of the most urgent challenges in recent years. This essay will dig into this phenomenon, including the impact of this and giving temporary solutions.
Some museums have an admission charge while some do not. In my opinion, the drawbacks of an entrance fee are eclipsed by its benefits in the sense that the income will be ploughed back into operation and development of the museums.
In recent times, the population have been using bikes less as a primary form of transportation. This essay will discuss the reasons for this decline and propose measures to encourage more folk to use bicycles.