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Band 6

Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •say how important New Year is to people in your country •describe how New Year is celebrated in your country •explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear Mary, I’m on cloud nine to hear from you. The topic of your project sounds very interesting
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 I would be glad to help you if I can. In Ukraine,
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 Year is one of the most significant holidays. It gives people the chance to gather and enjoy a truly magical time with their loved ones. Nowadays, it has gained even greater importance as many Ukrainians live abroad and return home for special occasions like
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, before the full-scale invasion, New Year’s Eve was always full of joy and celebration. Families prepared so much food that the tables seemed ready to collapse under its weight, and at
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 the sky lit up with fireworks.
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, the night was usually filled with events and parties where people could have a great time with their friends. Personally,
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 Year is my second favourite holiday. It carries a special, almost magical atmosphere. What I especially enjoy are the carols, and
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, the happiness of giving presents and seeing smiles on people’s faces. Of course,
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half of what I could tell, so I would be delighted to share more later
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 hear some interesting details about your project. With love, Fiza

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task response
You answer the task well. You tell why New Year is big in your country, how it is done, and what you like. Some parts give more detail, which would make the answer strong.
coherence
Your writing is easy to read and follows a good order. Work on making each paragraph have one main idea.
content
Clear link to the topic and clear sections.
style
Warm, friendly tone for a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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