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Band 4

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

There is an increasing concern about using bags, bottles, and packaging made of
plastic
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 in our day-to-day life, as they cannot be dissolved in the ground for thousands of years, creating a vast amount of waste in the ocean all around the world.
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, there are possible ways a reduction can happen with both governments' and individuals' constructive actions.
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with
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with,
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 the negative side, companies dump
plastic
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 waste in the sea in order to prevent toxicity on the earth's surface, adding a mixture of toxic chemicals into water that everyone uses in their daily activities.
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, a study done by the Canadian government showed that
plastic
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 garbage
reduced
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has reduced
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 water quality by 20 percentage points
since
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over
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 the
last
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 decade.
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, water animals are at higher risk of going extinct, as they are breathing and living in a noxious environment.
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, nodafers, a living species in the sea, are very rare to be found in the ocean after heavy use of
nondisposable
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non-biodegradable
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 material surged. In solution, governments should enforce
policy
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a policy
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,
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apply
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 which
would support
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supports
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 companies that are actively working on recycling
plastic
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. Not only governments but
also
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 individuals should be a key factor
for
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in
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 empowering the use of alternative elements, which are
disposable
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non-disposable
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 in the environment. Using products made of paper is the best example
for
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of
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 replacing. In conclusion,
while
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plastic
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 brings numerous detrimental impacts to ecosystems, officials and people around the globe can still
create
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make
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 a difference in future life by implementing positive attitudes towards consuming more sophisticated products.

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planning
Plan your answer. Tell what harm plastic causes and what people and governments can do. More detail is needed and you should use only true facts.
cohesion
Make each paragraph have one idea. Use topic sentences and good start and end lines. Use linking words like first, also, then, but, finally.
language
Be simple. Use easy words from common list. Check spellings and keep short sentences.
content
Use true and clear examples. If you use numbers, keep them simple and correct. If you name animals, use real names.
structure
The essay has a clear plan and a start, body, and end.
content
It gives some ideas on harm and on steps to fix the problem.
analysis
There is a good effort to show what can be done by people and by the state.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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