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Writing Samples
Band 3

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

There is
a
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an
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 increasing concern
of
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about
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 using bags, bottles and packaging made of
plastic
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 in our day-to-day life, as
it
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they
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 can not be dissolved in
ground
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the ground
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 for thousands of years, creating a vast amount of waste in the ocean all around the world.
However
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, there are possible ways a reduction can happen with both governments and
individuals
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individuals'
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 constructive actions.
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 with negative side, companies dump
plastic
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 waste in
sea
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the sea
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 in order to prevent toxicity on
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the earth
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earth
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Earth's
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 surface, adding a mixture of toxic chemicals into water that everyone uses in their daily activities.
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, a study done by
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 government showed that
plastic
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 garbage reduced water quality by 20
percentage
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per cent
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since
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over
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last
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the last
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 decade.
In addition
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, water animals are at higher risk of going extinct, as they are breathing and living in a noxious environment.
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, nodafers, a living species in
sea
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the sea
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, are very rare to be found in
ocean
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the ocean
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 after
heavy
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the heavy
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 use of
non disposable
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non-disposable
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material
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materials
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 surged. In solution, governments should enforce
policy
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a policy
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,
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apply
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 which would support companies that are actively working
recycling
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on recycling
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plastic
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. Not only governments but individuals should be a key factor for empowering
use
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the use
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 of alternative elements, which are disposable in
environment
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the environment
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. Using products made of paper is the best example
for
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of
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 replacing. In conclusion,
while
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,
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apply
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plastic
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 brings numerous detrimental
impact
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impacts
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 to
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the eco-system
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eco-system
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ecosystem
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, officials and people around the globe can still create a difference in future life by implementing positive attitudes towards consuming more sophisticated products.

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structure
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coherence
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grammar
Check grammar and spelling; fix wrong words.
content
You talk about both harm and fix
content
You give some examples of actions by people and government

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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