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The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitor to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart illustrates the number of
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 to a museum in three different types, including adult
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,
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 aged under 15, and special exhibition
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 from 1997 to 2012.
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, was significantly of Total
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 who visited a museum increased from 448,100 in 1997 to 525,200 in 2007 , and it decreased in 2012 to 504,300 people.
According to
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 the diagram, the major group of adult tourists in all the periods were similar to the total data
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 it had
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of
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300,100
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 in 1997 at first
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then
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 slightly rose to 400,500
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 in 2007, and there was a small drop in 2012 from 400,500 to 380,000
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.
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, the data shows
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' age under 15 were marginally slightly decreased from 1997-2012, from 120,000 to 82,000 people. The lowest number of tourist type is special exhibition
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, there were just 28,000 people in the beginning in 1997 , and
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 it was marginally increased over the period to 42,000 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "marginally" was used 2 times.
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