Robot and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening? do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?
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technology
is continuing to improve in order to replace workers in their positions. It is the writer's opinion that the reason for the replacement is Use synonyms
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is surely a negative development in society.
It must be acknowledged that return profit is the priority of employers. Linking Words
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technology
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, humans make errors all the time and that sometimes leads to minor problems which decrease the production process. Take Tesla as a primary example, the company replaced two-thirds of the mechanics and engineers because they had already developed AI scanners for the job.
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be noted that the action of firing employees to obtain machines that work more effectively contributes immensely to the unemployment rates which is a major problem all over the world. If robots can do whatever the labourers and engineers can, there will be fewer workers related to Linking Words
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and mechanics which will result in millions of workshops and courses to shut down. Use synonyms
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technology
could invade other sectors which drive more people into jobless. Use synonyms
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, the US have about a 12% increase in labor-related sectors and a roughly 8% decrease in machinery courses.
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