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You have recently moved to a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you decided to move to a different city Describe the new city and accommodation Ask your friend to arrange a visit You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Jay, I just wanted to let you know that I recently moved to a new city.
Last
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 month, I relocated from New York City to Los Angeles, California , because I received an exciting career opportunity here. As you know,
this
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 area is often called the Silicon Valley of the West since many top IT companies have their headquarters nearby, which makes it an ideal place for IT professionals like me to build a successful career. Let me give you a quick introduction to my new home. Los Angeles is a vibrant and multicultural city where you can meet people from all over the world. It offers plenty of attractions,
such
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 as large parks, shopping malls, beaches, and mountains close by. Accommodation is
also
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 more affordable compared with New York. At the moment, I’m renting a small but cosy apartment near downtown, with a stunning view of the skyline. There’s a cultural event happening next week, and I’d love for you to visit and enjoy it with me. Since there’s a public holiday coming up, it would be the perfect time for you to come and spend a few days here. I really hope you can make it. Best wishes, Smit Patel

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task
Make the invite clearer by asking for a date and travel plan.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas (for example, 'also', 'then', 'however').
structure
Split the text into clear lines. Put each idea in its own paragraph.
grammar
Check small spots like a space after 'California' and a comma use.
content
Reason for move with a good link to work.
description
Nice view of the city and home.
tone
Warm and friendly tone that fits a letter to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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