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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the counryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

There is a significant growing rate of rural to urban area migration across the globe, reducing
population
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the population
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 in the countryside. I believe
this
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 is complete negative progress for upcoming future. The main reason behind
this
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 phenomenon is that
majority
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the majority
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 of agricultural land is located near rural areas, which produce fruits, vegetables, and many more for daily intake. Migration towards cities
lead
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leads
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a
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to a
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reduction
on
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in
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production
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the production
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 of these everyday food items, as there can be a huge shortage
for
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of
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 workers, resulting in
,
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apply
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 lower supply each year.
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,
There
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there
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 are high chances of food prices rising extensively in
shorter
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a shorter
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 period of time. Not only countryside have an impact
but
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, but
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 cities can
also
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 face major
problem
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problems
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. As more and more people shift to congested
area
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areas
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 for better job opportunities and lifestyle, accommodating a large number of individuals is an unavoidable issue.
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, citizens have to spend more for living as
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of houses
are
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is
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 not increasing at
same
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the same
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 rate as immigration.
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, Surat, a city in India, had a mass immigration for job options from rural
area
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areas
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 in 1990,
having
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resulting in
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 a 40-50% price jump for rent and housing. In conclusion,
The
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the
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 countryside and urban areas can have
negative
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a negative
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 effect on their respective divisions.
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,
this
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 could have a detrimental impact on
country's
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the country's
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 growth as living cost would
surpass
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increase
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 each year.

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coherence
Make a plan with three clear ideas and back each with a fact or example.
grammar
Use simple, correct grammar and fix common errors like 'there are' vs 'there is' and 'in the countryside'.
coherence
Link ideas with short, clear phrases so the flow is easy to follow.
lexical
Check use of words; stay in a small set of easy words.
stance
The writer has a clear view that moving to the city can be bad for the future.
example
An example from a city (Surat) is used to show a point.
structure
There is a simple plan for the essay with a start and end.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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