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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The map illustrates a master plan of
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the islip
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islip
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Islip Centre
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centre
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 in the future.
Overall
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, there are several
improvement
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improvements
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 on shops in the north of the main
road
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, and the
centre
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 will have a ring
road
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 for pedestrian and
cars
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car
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 circulation.
In addition
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, the main
road
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 will be closed
due to
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 housing and
cars
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car
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 park development.
To begin
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 with, the shops on the north side of the main
road
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 will be replaced by
bus
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a bus
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 station,
shopping a
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a shopping
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centre
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, a car park, and a new settlement. On the other side, the Shops remain
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,
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and a new residential area will be developed
on
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to
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 the south.
Thus
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, the Islip
centre
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 in the future will be surrounded by a ring
road
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 with dual carriageway and will establish a better circulation for cars and others. The school remain
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in it
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it
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its
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 position, and the new
road
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 will increase
the
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apply
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accesses
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access
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 for
student
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students
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 from
west
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the west
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 and east areas. Following that, the southern settlement in
southern
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the southern
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 area will gain better access from the development of a new
road
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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